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27 February 2011 @ 07:39 pm
14 - strangers on a train, ohmiya, AU, g (for now), chaptered ~ PROLOGUE  
This is a little monster that has grown out of the drabble prompts I asked for earlier this week. The original prompt was "i was just thinking recently that i see lots of fic where either a) nino is the girl, or b) nino and ohno are both girls, but i've never seen one where only ohno is the girl. make it happen. romance a plus :D". So, that's what this is. XD Many, many thanks to harinezumi_kun for not only the prompt but being a fantastic beta and dealing with my inability to keep in present tense.

strangers on a train - ohmiya, AU, g (for now), chaptered, 859 words - PROLOGUE
Nino is a salaryman who's trying to stay under the radar; Ohno's an artist just struggling to keep her life in order. Still, they're just strangers on a train.



The first time Nino sees her, he's in love. But that's not really unusual, is it? It happens almost every day on his way into or home from work: he spots a pretty girl on the train and daydreams he's in a relationship with her. When she gets off (she always gets off first), it's like a breakup and Nino's heart clenches as painfully as it would have if it had all been outside of his head. It's just how he is. He's a dreamer.

Until the day she doesn't get off first.

The girl is pretty, but she's not model-like. They never are. Nino's had his fair-share of true relationships with the ones who dress to impress and they never turn out right. No, the girl isn't model-like, but she's perfect. Her hair is pulled into a messy bun, little soft bits floating around her face. A piece sticks up, almost, and Nino thinks perhaps that's the best. She wears glasses, small round frames that have fallen down the bridge of her narrow nose as her head tips forward in sleep. She could have been snoring, but Nino wouldn't know it - he's too far away. The winter is cold this year, the wind biting but the girl's jacket seems far too thin for it. Her scarf hangs loosely around her neck, offering no real warmth. Her jeans are paint-stained, and not in a fashionable way. She's an artist, that much is certain.

But it's her hands that really draw Nino's attention. They're elegant - the fingers are long and the nails pointed into gentle round curves. They're hands girls would kill for, hands that girls would go to salons to have done up with ridiculous rhinestones and cupcakes. Hands that simply have little bits of resin stuck up under the nails.

She'd been on the train at Nino's stop from work, and all too soon the stop for his neighborhood is called. She hasn't gotten off. They always get off first. He thinks maybe, maybe she over-slept her stop. That had to be it. They always got off first.

But when Nino stands to wait by the doors, bare inches away from the slumbering girl of his dreams, she wakes. Slowly, she blinks up at him, her eyes sleepy. She blinks a few more times and then she does it - she smiles.

As Nino steps off the train, he's in love.


Ohno Satomi is exactly as she appears: an artist. Well, to be completely accurate, she's a conbini worker, but her soul is that of an artist. And occasionally, a dancer.

Satomi doesn't mind her life. Her apartment is small, cluttered, and there isn't even room for a proper easel. It's small, but it suits her just fine. Her roommate, Masaki, tends to clutter it up even more with her gaming systems, but Satomi knows better than to try and say no to that smile. Besides, Masaki had the better job – Satomi only had day-old conbini bento's as a benefit.

At 25, Satomi thinks she's happy with her life. She's never needed anyone, really. Why would she? She has her art and Masaki so what else does she really need? It's not like any self-respecting Japanese man would be happy with a wife who zones out, can't cook, is constantly covered in paint or resin and has never bothered to learn how to drive. She just isn't a catch, and she knows it.

Masaki constantly tells her she is beautiful, and will even dress her up to take to the club from time to time. Masaki is truly beautiful: long legs and a bright smile that is quickly making its name across the fashion magazines the girls in Shibuya eat up. It won't be long before Masaki out grows Satomi and their tiny apartment completely.

That was her train of thought, that early February day on the Keihin-Tohoku line. Her face, to those around her, appears to be that of a slumbering train-goer. But she isn't asleep. No, she'd learned that lesson her first few weeks in Tokyo years ago: it wasn't worth the extra fare adjustments.

No, she is only thinking, and that's why it is easy to feel they eyes on her from across the train. In her mind, so many scenarios play out: a tired salaryman, thinking she was probably actually a boy, given her state of dress and trying to piece it together. That’s most likely it. Has to be. Who else would look at her and her paint-stained jeans?

Yes, that has to be it. But… if that’s the case, then why do her cheeks flush so much without her consent?

All too soon, she feels alone again, but then not for long. Slowly, her eyes flutter open and she gazes up at the person who had been watching her so closely. To her surprise, he isn't some tired salaryman. Well, he probably is, but he couldn't have been any older than her, maybe twenty five at the most with a dark shock of slightly rumpled hair and a cute little mole on his chin. It's his eyes that get her though, so bright and smart, even at the end of a long day. She likes that about him the most, even over the cute mole. Slowly, she smiles at him.

For the first time, Satomi is in love.




AN: Phew! I actually have quite a bit more of this brewing in my brain (they haven't even met yet!), so expect more in the coming days/weeks. Again, huge thanks to Jess. ♥
 
 
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harinezumi_kun: nino is kingharinezumi_kun on February 28th, 2011 12:51 am (UTC)
*STEALS FIRST* /greedy bitch
1992*4##111: arashi → ohmiya → time for kissesgimmick_game on February 28th, 2011 12:52 am (UTC)
hot damn you're quick. XD
harinezumi_kun: ohmiya - smilesharinezumi_kun on February 28th, 2011 12:58 am (UTC)
ehn, it's the weekend, and i like to spend my weekends ficcing and checking my email every 5 minutes, so :D

proper comment: I LOVE WHAT YOU DID WITH MY RANDOM VAGUE PROMPT ♥ ♥ ♥ and how you incorporated nino and his imaginary relationships with girls on the train (he did talk about this in an interview, right? i didn't imagine that??) and, as you know, i love satomi ♥ she embodies the artist i wanted to grow up to be when i was in highschool XD; i can't wait to see where you take this!!
Jaimerawambition on February 28th, 2011 12:58 am (UTC)
*melts*

I've been wanting a Girl!Ohno fic seriously for ages & this totally hits the spot! I can't wait until they actually met! Can we expect some side Sakuraiba or Junba maybe?

Anyway I really like the set-up so far & I'll be waiting patiently for the next installment ^___^
Matty DeKayhayatoryulover on February 28th, 2011 01:45 am (UTC)
This makes me excited!!! = ) I cant wait to see what happens!!! Please update soon!!! = )
carey_chancarey_chan on February 28th, 2011 09:35 am (UTC)
I know this is random but...your nickname and your icon...we like the same <3
Matty DeKayhayatoryulover on February 28th, 2011 03:52 pm (UTC)
That makes me really happy!! = ) <3
Ramen Loverramen_lover30 on February 28th, 2011 02:34 am (UTC)
Interesting, I'm looking forward for the next chpter XD
。^‿^。: Peace sign KOKORITSU! - Ninocalerine on February 28th, 2011 02:36 am (UTC)
This is really really lovely :D
Ayarashiayarashi on February 28th, 2011 03:19 am (UTC)
Love this <3
Can't wait for more (:
nakabibighaninakabibighani on February 28th, 2011 06:16 am (UTC)
wow :) the contrast is really enticing. nino a salaryman, and ohno an artist.. nino being in love almost everyday, and ohno falling in love for the first time.. i wonder how they would mee :) this is all too exciting. and new! and i love trains. reminds me of "my sassy girl"

thanks for this ^_^ looking forward to the next chapter already ;)
Revyallodole on February 28th, 2011 08:52 am (UTC)
I never read genderswap-fics because I don't like them, but I had to read this one 'cause you're one of my favourite writers of this fandom /creeps

I think I'll be coming back to read more, because this was so well and beautifully written.
sunscribblesunscribble on February 28th, 2011 08:57 am (UTC)
ASDFGHJKL;'
so,so awesome♥

Atularashi07 on February 28th, 2011 09:41 am (UTC)
I'm so looking forward for more! xDD
carey_chancarey_chan on February 28th, 2011 09:52 am (UTC)
girl!ohno...*scratches her chin* usually I`m not really fond of ohchan as bottom..but if its girl!ohno...this even made me think of girlxgirl ohmiya *lol* cause I still think that kazu`s too pretty to be a boy XDD
risuw_chan: ohmiyarisuw_chan on February 28th, 2011 01:25 pm (UTC)
well, considering that ohno sure have a body part means for girl.... *lips, eyes, jaw line, eyebrow, hands, waist*

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actually the role is perfect for him her XDDD
Himitsu 17himitsu_17 on February 28th, 2011 10:58 am (UTC)
Oh o-o
I haven't really read a Ohno!Girl fic before (Just rare OS) so I look forward reading this one ^^ It'll be a great experience! Thank you !!
It's cute this beginning! ♥
I love it!
Thank you ~
platinum28platinum28 on February 28th, 2011 12:39 pm (UTC)
This definitely looks promising! I'll keep an eye out for it. ;D
risuw_chan: buttrisuw_chan on February 28th, 2011 01:02 pm (UTC)
i love this <333

i really love this <333
and yes, masaki had to be a model XDDDDDD
omg can't wait for mooore <333
ichi_toshimiyaichi_toshimiya on February 28th, 2011 02:01 pm (UTC)
Gosh.... *snicker*
By only reading your little comment up their I already falling in love...

Coz you right...
I haven't heard any fict that Ohchan was the girl...
Usually it would be Nino, coz...
Well indeed Nino personality and his face and posture really suit to be a girl...

But when I read this I falling again for Ohchan girl... XD
For me she is cute, so unique to be a girl...
Even you make her ro be just like Ohchan but in a different gender still is cute, choo~ kawaii... XD

So...
I'm really gonna wait for the next...
So see ya...
And thank you so much for making this fict and share with us...
Jyaaa ne....... ^-^v
ichi_toshimiyaichi_toshimiya on September 14th, 2011 05:18 am (UTC)
Hello dear, I don't know are you gonna read this or not....
But I'm just curious...
Are you already drop your fict here?
Coz it was too bad if you do, coz I love it...
So just want to say hi...
Hope you would continue this... :))
♥♥♥ギガマジメ我ファイト♥♥♥zukkoke_iero on February 28th, 2011 04:33 pm (UTC)
girl!ohno? Wow. That... Caught my attention. Love yaoi for its beautiful, forbidden male and male relationship, and if one of them turns to be a girl, i wasn't sure if i'd like it but miracle did happen with you ♥ awesome piece! Can't wait for updates :D
Momo: OHMIYAmongo_o_o on February 28th, 2011 04:40 pm (UTC)
i usually don't like genderswitch, but this..sounds really good! i will wait for more :)
Nika: ohmiyaracanai on February 28th, 2011 10:20 pm (UTC)
Your Girl!Ohno is different from the few Girl!Ohno's I've stumbled upon so far - which means she is great! I really like the way you started this: "As Nino steps off the train, he's in love." - "For the first time, Satomi is in love."
Waiting for the next chapters! =)
unbroken_glass: ashley tisdaleunbroken_glass on August 19th, 2012 07:03 am (UTC)
OMG THIS IS AMAZING WHY ISN'T THERE A CONTINUATION? T_________T